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Post by jh1980 on Oct 29, 2007 8:36:30 GMT -1
Don't understand the fifth line though, not a criticism, just doesn't quite "read" right? Maybe not to you Julian Yes - well - that's what I mean maybe, I don't understand where the stress falls It's still very good, love the form, and how it forms a cycle.
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Post by Mrs H on Oct 29, 2007 8:39:08 GMT -1
Maybe not to you Julian Yes - well - that's what I mean maybe, I don't understand where the stress falls It's still very good, love the form, and how it forms a cycle. I was rubbish at poetry at uni. I preferred factual writing (strange that I now prefer spurious writing!)
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Post by C@V on Oct 29, 2007 8:41:19 GMT -1
Balance of care and feelings of hope A message of love and a reason to cope. One half is reasoned the other bemused Of how one can be loved but yet feel so confused. Now that’s there is life for you to behold A shadow remains of a future untold. If I am your lover, your soulmate and friend You’ll harbour regret if I’m not there at the end. My message of love is my reason to cope To balance our cares and live together in hope. That's wonderful
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Post by HURLOCK on Oct 29, 2007 8:44:21 GMT -1
Ignore him H, it's not explicit enough for him
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Post by jh1980 on Oct 29, 2007 8:44:23 GMT -1
Yes - well - that's what I mean maybe, I don't understand where the stress falls It's still very good, love the form, and how it forms a cycle. I was rubbish at poetry at uni. I preferred factual writing (strange that I now prefer spurious writing!) Really? Seem pretty good to me. Yes hence the journalism I guess? Can you explain though how I'm meant to read this line - "Now that’s there is life for you to behold" Cos that's gonna bug me otherwise...
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Post by Mrs H on Oct 29, 2007 8:45:29 GMT -1
I can't Julian it's a secret ;D
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Post by Mrs H on Oct 29, 2007 8:45:46 GMT -1
Balance of care and feelings of hope A message of love and a reason to cope. One half is reasoned the other bemused Of how one can be loved but yet feel so confused. Now that’s there is life for you to behold A shadow remains of a future untold. If I am your lover, your soulmate and friend You’ll harbour regret if I’m not there at the end. My message of love is my reason to cope To balance our cares and live together in hope. That's wonderful
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Post by HURLOCK on Oct 29, 2007 8:47:01 GMT -1
well what do you think it's saying Julio
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Post by jh1980 on Oct 29, 2007 8:50:21 GMT -1
I can't Julian it's a secret ;D well what do you think it's saying Julio "Now that’s there is life for you to behold" Now that is; There is life for you to behold - makes sense. Otherwise - no clue. Don't be having a go at me, as a whole I think it's a bloody brilliant poem, just frustrated cos I don't "get" what that line means, it looks to me as if something else was meant, just don't know what!
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Post by jh1980 on Oct 29, 2007 9:14:42 GMT -1
Thanks for nothing then...!
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Post by Mrs H on Oct 29, 2007 9:23:50 GMT -1
Thanks for nothing then...! Don't be angry. It's a personal poem. You don't have to understand it all.
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Post by HURLOCK on Oct 29, 2007 9:24:09 GMT -1
Jesus who rattled your cage!
Now that’s there is life for you to behold - the person has given themselves to their partner! Their life as one
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Post by Mrs H on Oct 29, 2007 9:27:30 GMT -1
Jesus who rattled your cage! Now that’s there is life for you to behold - the person has given themselves to their partner! Their life as one That's what I like about poetry it's open to interpretation. It's not what I meant by it but I can understand why you would think that Hurls.
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Post by jh1980 on Oct 29, 2007 9:29:33 GMT -1
Jesus who rattled your cage! Now that’s there is life for you to behold - the person has given themselves to their partner! Their life as one *grumbles* No I understand that and the poem as a whole, I just... ah bollocks, I was just saying that line didn't read right but maybe it's just my fuddled brain. Sorry I opened my gob
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Post by Mrs H on Oct 29, 2007 9:30:58 GMT -1
What's with the mood, dude?
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Post by jh1980 on Oct 29, 2007 9:36:05 GMT -1
What's with the mood, dude? *shrugs* dunno really. I wasn't having a go... just that line didn't make sense to me... *tries to hang on to point, but realises should just let it go...* nice rhymes!
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Post by Mrs H on Oct 29, 2007 9:39:25 GMT -1
What's with the mood, dude? *shrugs* dunno really. I wasn't having a go... just that line didn't make sense to me... *tries to hang on to point, but realises should just let it go...* nice rhymes! Word! I'm going to be the next Snoop ;D
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Post by HURLOCK on Oct 29, 2007 9:39:35 GMT -1
Now that's what I like about poetry it's open to interpretation. It's not what I meant by it but I can understand why you would think that Hurls. Indeed Laura, I also thought it could mean having a child
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Post by jh1980 on Oct 29, 2007 9:42:13 GMT -1
Word! I'm going to be the next Snoop ;D The beat, it is alleged, "don't stop" until the break of dawn! ;D
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Post by Mrs H on Oct 29, 2007 9:44:47 GMT -1
Now that's what I like about poetry it's open to interpretation. It's not what I meant by it but I can understand why you would think that Hurls. Indeed Laura, I also thought it could mean having a child You're a smart cookie aren't you Hurls
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